Timed Writing Grade

I would award my timed writing as a 7 overall, because I offered a reasonable analysis of a single pivotal moment of a protagonist in a bildungsroman, while incorporating how the pivotal moment shaped the meaning and entire work as a whole. However, my analysis was less thorough and undeserving of a higher score due to the fact that I lacked certain qualities to the writing, such as, textual support. My essay was less perceptive than that of an 8 or 9, while still being insightful and understanding of the topic.

If I were given the chance to revise my essay I would provide a more persuasive analysis of the novel and how a single pivotal moment shaped the psychological or moral development of my protagonist. I would contribute specific textual support to compliment my analysis and be less repetitive in my introduction while enhancing my vocabulary, thus yielding a more sophisticated outcome and an effective control of language.   

 After reading the response examples, I have learned that it is better to just simply analyze the topic and stray away from plot summary. I have also seen that the higher graded papers seemed to have exquisite vocabulary. These responses may not be perfect or entirely correct, but they answered the question and gave textual support to back up their view of the topic. I would change the fact that I didn’t incorporate that much textual support and I would be more descriptive when analyzing the protagonist’s maturity.

          I feel that in my timed writings I need the most help in incorporating more textual support while still being sophisticated in my perception and devilment of the prompt. I think in class I could focus most on specific parts of text from a particular novel and then revolve paragraphs around them.